the first one doesn't make sense. the girl is talking out loud and says all of that? like, i'm imagining a 2 year old rambling and saying all of that. is that what it's supposed to be? if so, i'd write it like this:
1) "I see my dad. He is in here. 'Hi dad,'" she said.
for the second one, you leave out the comma after the ?. oh, and said doesn't really make sense there - maybe "asked" or "questioned."